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This is my first fan fiction! Took around an hour to write, and spell check it, but its done! Since this is my first, there might be a few problems with it, so bear with me, and im open to friendly critism, so enjoy! chapter two should be up some time soon!


'XJ10' a mlaatr fan fiction

chapter 1

A long time ago, in a faraway government research facility, They had started to create a robot of their own, this robot was named XJ10. They were trying to make XJ10 superior to XJ9 A.K.A Jenny Wakeman in every way. Unfortunatley, they failed, and actually made XJ10 the opposite of what they expected him to be, so, embarrassed, they started to hide the evidence of his existence, they deactivated him, and launched XJ10 into Space. In case of him ever coming back to Earth, Scientists wiped him of all his memory, and knowledge of his functions as a robot. About two years later, Brad and Jenny were strolling along the beach. It was a regular day where Brad tells a funny story from school. Little did Jenny know that her life was about to change forever. Far in space,  a car-sized meteorite was within Earth's gravitational pull.

Jenny automatically sensed the meteorite, however, it was just a C-class, and those always burned up in the Atmosphere. This meteor was not normal though, there was something within it. What was left of XJ10 was inside it. At the moment, XJ10 was missing the bottom half of his left leg, three fingers on his right hand, and lastly his right lens on his eye was cracked. His metallic body was battered, burned, and dented in some places. As the meteor started to burn up in the atmosphere, it was heading towards the beach that Jenny and Brad were at. At that time, the meteor had burned away, and it was XJ10 that was falling in the sky. He crashed into the sand 5 meters in front of Jenny and Brad. It was a large crater that shook the ground around it. Brad fell to the ground because of the force of the crash, Jenny, however was still standing because she can't be knocked over from small ground vibrations. "What the hell!?" Brad yelled, getting up, and brushing the sand off himself. "What the…!" Jenny said. But she realized that if it was a meteor, where were the bits of space rock? She ran over to the crater, and peered inside it. It was deep. She could only see 5 feet into it, the crater went in so deep, that it broke through the rock layer below the wet sand level. Jenny cocked her head in confusion. "What is it?" Brad called from behind her, too scared to come close to the deep hole. "It's just strange, there are no pieces of rock, and it's much too deep for a C-class meteor." Jenny called back to him. Brad shrugged in response. Just then, Jenny saw some sparks coming from the blackness of the hole. "Sparks? Wait a second!" Jenny formed a crane system, with her arm. She slowly lowered herself into the hole. "Be careful Jen!" Brad yelled. "I Will!" Jenny called back.

Brad waited outside of the crater. Several minutes later Jenny emerged from the hole. She was carrying something large in her arm. "What is it Je-" Brad began to ask but he was cut off. "Move!" Jenny said, laying the thing on the ground. It looked like a boy, around Jenny's and Brad's age. But… To His, and Jenny's surprise, he was metallic. He was a robot, and a little similar to Jenny. He was missing part of his leg, some fingers in his right hand, and the lens of his right eye was cracked. "Your… you're a robot…" Jenny said to the robot boy. He looked unconscious. Jenny shook him slightly. "hello?" She asked the motionless robot.  She touched his arm, which activated The robot boy's movement sensors, this brought him online. His arm moved, and he blinked. "He's alive!" Brad said cheerfully. Jenny smiled slightly, "Whats your name?" Jenny asked the robot. "XJ…" The robot didn't finish, because he coughed up oil. He missing leg socket sputtered, His eyes dimmed. "Warning! Critical damage! Emergency Shutdown process initiated!" A robotic voice yelled from within the Robot boy. And with that, He coughed up a little more oil, and shut off. "uh oh!" Jenny said. "Is he dead?" Brad asked, worried. "I don't know, He's in bad shape, I need to take him to my mom, she'll know what to do! See ya later Brad!" And with that, jenny blasted off, carrying the robot boy in her arms.
This is my first fanfiction! 'XJ10' It took me a while to make the banner, write the story, and spell check, so yeah. Im open to friendly critism! and this is only the first chapter! part two will be up shortly! If your wondering what XJ10 looks like, its my mlaatr custom robot: [link]

next chapter: [link]
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Chotzejarrell Featured By Owner May 4, 2013  Hobbyist
😍😊👍cute and cool story
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SukiR Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2012  Professional Artisan Crafter
Awesome :D looking forward to chapter 2!
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IDandPachy Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2012
thanks! do you think there are any parts that need improving? just asking, cuz I want it to be perfect! :D
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SukiR Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2012  Professional Artisan Crafter
Nah, it's really good the way it is :D
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IDandPachy Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2012
yay! thanks a lot! :)
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SukiR Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2012  Professional Artisan Crafter
You're welcome! :)
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IDandPachy Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2012
and I don't know why I said thank you twice! :D
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SukiR Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2012  Professional Artisan Crafter
Haha it's fine :D
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IDandPachy Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2012
thank you!
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